Semarang State University (SSU) is the fourth most favorite
campus in Indonesia according to Kompas newspaper. SSU is located in Semarang,
the capital city of central java, Indonesia. It has eight (8) faculties, they
are the faculty of education science, the faulty of social science, the faculty
of mathematics and natural science, the faculty of engineering, the faculty of
sport science, the faculty of economics, and the faculty of law. The student
body is approximately 40.000 students enrolled in those 8 faculties. Beside that
SSU is called Conservation Campus in Indonesia. It is the first University that
declared itself as Conservation University in Indonesia. The visions of
conservation are to make healthy environment and no pollution. Beside natural
conservation, there is the cultural conservation. SSU shows to the public about
the culture of Indonesia. The students also make some performances like
traditional dancing and arts.
Tidak semua yang aku tulis adalah aku, dan berhentilah menerka-nerka, sebab dalam permainan kata, aku bebas menjadi apa dan siapa, karena dalam dunia kata aku adalah sutradaranya, aku adalah dalang pada tiap cerita.
Dear NIssa,
BalasHapusI love reading your blog. It’s about our UNNES right? Your sentences structure is good, easy to understand the meaning. You used the usual words to arrange your sentences. Nevertheless, there are some points that you need to work on.
Capitalize letters. The 6th line. java -> Java, be careful when you wrote it sister. Java should be written in capital letter in the first.
Spelling. The 8th line. The faulty -> the faculty, may be it just a little mistake but you need to take care of it in order to avoid misunderstanding.
Diction. The 20th line. “The visions of conservation are to make healthy environment and no pollution.” The words “no pollution” can be changed into “clean environment” because when you wrote no pollution it doesn’t connect with previous words.
“The visions of conservation are to make healthy and clean environment.”
I think just that, overall your piece is good. Good job sista . Thank you.